Who would watch/read this?

Long ago in Japan when everything was like royal. You wore either royal to merchants clothing, to decent to poor. A little girl named Satou Kasumi lived in a happy family. Her father and mother loved her very much. Her father had a sickness that was deadly. They did everything to help him get better but he ended up dying. The little girl became very sad, and the mother grew very tired because of having to take care of Kasumi alone. The little girl was around 5 years old and wandered around town. She was out buying some milk and saw a boy about 5 years older then her selling some fortunes and food. He looked very poor and lonely. Kasumi saw him and walked toward him and said in the most cutest voice, '' Can you help me? '' he looked at her and couldn't say no to a face like hers. He got up and packed his things and followed her. She guilded him to her house and to her moms room. She was sweating like never before. He gasped and dropped his bag and said, '' What happened? '' '' I don't know sir. My mommy has been like this ever since my dad has died. '' He bent down to her height and said, '' Don't worry we'll help her.''


Ever since he helped he has been living with them. The mother adored him and wanted his help. She also didn't want him to be on the streets. Years have passed and Kasumi is 14 and is outstandingly great in Martial Arts. She can beat up anything thats in her way. The boy was named Ichiro. He is 19. He calls Kasumi '' Lady or Kawaii Chan '' and the mom '' Ma'am or Madame '' He is skilled in sword fighting. He trained himself and is really good at it. One day they got a letter about being involved in the royal branch. So they visited the Emperor who was only 18. His name was Ryu Yukio. Kasumi and Ichiro had dressed in there best and said goodbye to Kasumi's mother ( Hoshi ) They went to the Emperor and were welcomed. The Emperor had told Kasumi she was the princess and that Ichiro was one of the warriors that battled. They were shocked and couldn't believe this was true. They were not wealthy and never were apart of anything, but they accepted. Kasumi was guilded to her room. Her room was wonderful. She can always brew tea and make Gyoza.


It was a little pass 10 and Kasumi was by the river under a star fruit. Very rare to have star fruit trees around. She saw one that looked very good. She reached and couldn't get it. An arm from know where reached and grabbed it. Kasumi stopped and turned around and said, '' Emperor! '' '' Is this the one you wanted? '' She looked at the star fruit in his hand and said uneasy, '' Uh yes. Thank you. " " Your welcome. " she took the star fruit and placed it in her bag that had some warm gyoza and some brewed Matcha, a very expensive, wonderful, rare tea. It was the finest of all tea. ~ I have more but i typed to much do you want more? E-mail me ! @ cutiecat595@yahoo.com Thanks|||I probably wouldn't, to be honest, (maybe it's because I'm more of an action/adventure fan?) because there's no plot, really. (I mean, what you have so far is about a love triangle, am I right? Two boys have a crush on one girl?) So every episode/chapter is going to be about them, and not a single problem except the two boys having a crush on one girl. Okay, so what? Where's the problem? What do you want the reader to know?


You have what it takes to be a writer, but nobody wants to read a romance novel that doesn't have drama, right? Look at the Luxe Series, they're not talking about "oh and this is what he said" "what she said" and blah blah blah, a girl walks in on her boyfriend and another girl talking, now that's what romance readers are looking for.





So my answer is no. Not until you improve on it. (I know you could do it!!!)|||You need a lot more practice, and you need to slow down. Take a situation and describe everything you can. Do it over and over, and you will become a great writer.|||ya proly