What do you think of these lyrics so far?

Well these are really short since this is what I have so far.



I’m so tired of myself pity games

My skin shivers from your touch

My skin has become so cold from those long winter nights

As the sun breaks into the new day

I still wonder what has come over me

I look to the sky above longing for answers

All I need is a kiss and hug goodnight

To last me though this night

But instead all receive is meaningless glare and snarl

Your empty threats won’t hurt me

As much as your fists too

The silence only makes me more unstable

As you isolated me from reality once again

All I need a meaningful promise from you

Even if it doesn’t come true

But instead all I receive from you are hatefully bitter taunts

Aimed at finding a new flaws about me

When in reality there all about you



Well that's kinda it, I'm still working on it so this is my first draft. I also got the inspiration from this song called "My Skin by Natalie Merchant" So tell me what you think.What do you think of these lyrics so far?
Whoa. That's wonderful. Do something with that.What do you think of these lyrics so far?
i think this song has alot of meaning to it, and it is very good..try adding a chorus and also try and make some lines ryhme i always frind it helps me with a good catchy song.What do you think of these lyrics so far?
Brilliant :)
Awesome!



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